Born in March of 1975,on a cold Wednesday morning under Pisces.I was blessed with my name Rafael.
In Spanish,my name means (God has healed). In Hebrew tradition Rafael was on of the Seven Archangels,who appears in the Old Testaments,the book of Tobit. I am 419 months old,I am 1,820 weeks old,I am 12,740 dayd old in short I am 34.Some characteristics that comes with my name goes as follows.Perfectionist,powerful,logical to name a few.
To me my name is black and white,night and day.My soul urge is seven,my inner dream is seven.My vowels sweet as chocolate,my consonants smooth as champagne when put together.It's like a slow dance to your favorite love song,on a summer night.When in anger I am thunder striking and roaring thru the night.
My parents gave me this honer,I am JR to my father,I am love to my mother,blessed by the heavens for all time I will be Rafael.
2 comments:
Ralphie--
As I told you before, your writing is AWESOME. I think you have an exceptional grasp of how to use imagination in your writing. I think your second paragraph about how many months, weeks, and days old you are is really cool and interesting too.
What do you mean in Paragraph 3 when you talk about the number 7? Is that the number of letters in Ralphie? If so, did you know that you did not include the name Ralphie in your whole piece? How ironic because WE call you Ralphie.
Also, here are some editing notes:
1. When typing, use two spaces after periods. Use one space after commas.
2. Spelling word: honor
3. When you precede a list of things, use a colon:
"Some characteristics that come with my name are as followed: perfectionist, powerful, logical, to name a few."
4. See other uses for commas:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/GRAMMAR/commas.htm#3
Especially number 3, which talks about using a comma in places like "To me my name is black and white...." ---> "To me, my name is black and white..."
This is excellent Ralphie, I can't wait to see what the finished product looks like!
Karen
good writing piece
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