Benny showed he was a special student from day one.
Like went he started School.
The day before he would checked his bookbag to make chore he hade his pencil,eras,notebook ect. Benny would ask mammy cant you get my unifrom ready and manny would say o.k.
The next day mammy would wake me up at eith o'clock to get ready for School.
Benny would get out of bed and stictch him self, he would watch his teeth with his gumby touch buch and his bubble gum tub past,"as mammy prepear his breakfast".
Benny would dress him self and eat his breakfast as he washing his favoret cartoos , with was gumble in to eigt thirthg. At eight yhirth he would say mammy is time to go , so we gat awere coat nd his bookbag and headed to School.
On the way to School I would see some of me friends doing the some. in to we rich the light, were the closing god would be to help us close the street.
One I get to School I would sead good morining to Ms.Santiago and way good bay to my mammy.
In class I would do some reading and whiting, them I would go to music class with Ms,Leon. I would lien son like twinkle twinkle little stare,The winse winse speder, and all Mcdonals hade a farm. I would go to gun in to two O'clock.
At two Ms. Santiago would pick us up to go back to home room to do more work. That dat I gat a spelling test with I gat one hundred.
At the end of the day I would collect all me tins to ger read to go back home.
At home I show mammy me spelling test and she was so proud she omost state to cry.
Me mam was so porud of me she brogt me a toy car with l love .
Could you bolife that in to this day me mother sead has me test, with she still look at went she does cling.
went you have kids no one told you how are they going to do
Kids not come with introcoins
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3 comments:
i like it and i can imagine how much maria loves him and whatever happened he will be her baby boy
Hi Maria!
I'm so glad you finally posted your writing piece to the blog. I really like how you structured your piece and how each paragraph matches a different time of the day. It helped me to follow exactly what was happening. I also liked how your first and last sentences ("Benny showed he was a special student from day one" and "Kids do not come with instructions") captured the theme and deeper meaning of your piece.
I noticed that you wrote in the point of view of Benny for some of the piece. Find the places where you wrote "Benny" and "he", and change them to "I" so that this pattern is consistent throughout the piece. It will help the reader to understand from the start that this story is written in the point of view of Benny.
I see you have been working hard, Maria, keep up the great effort and hard work!
hi:
maria i like what you wrote
it was every interesting .
i miss you in class bye i will see.
jesus
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