Alvin was a menace to his grandparents,he almost set their house on fire.
It was overt that alvin has no home training,he would shout and scream in front of
the neighbours.
People try to undermine his grandparents skills,but they stand firm because they raise
his parent right.
All the children knew Alvin was naive,so they tricked him of his lunch money.
Alvin parent morale went low,when he was compel to leave the school.
Hi Orlette:
ReplyDeleteBe careful of run-on sentences. After each thought, make sure you put a period.
*Alvin was a menace to his grandparents. He almost set their house on fire.
Be careful with your punctuation-- you need apostrophes in this sentence:
*Alvin's parents' morale went low when he was compelled to leave the school.
I really like the sentence for naive and menace especially!
See my note to you about using the word overt. If you'd like to use it in this context, I would write something like:
*Alvin's shouting and screaming were overt examples of his lack of home training.
I would use the word overt as an adjective right before a noun.
Keep up the hard work, Orlette!
Thank you Karen, i will do what you say.using my period,and being careful with my apostrophes,and the way i used some of the words.thanks again.
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